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The writing in this feature does an excellent job of setting up the world and the characters in just a few pages at the beginning of this script. The writer immediately puts the reader into the middle of the story without wasting a second on extraneous exposition. It’s immediately clear what type of character Scathach is and what she has gone through. This script’s action sequences are excellent
because they are fast, high stakes, and full of emotion. All of these elements expertly draw the
reader in, making them want to continue reading.
The premise of the script is uniquely compelling because this script is based on Irish
mythology. The origin of this story offers intellectual property which can make your scripts more
popular because there’s something existing to sell it off or compare it to. Using this older
mythology that’s never been exposed to an American audience is incredibly wise because there’s
no one to tell you that your interpretation is wrong and more likely you’ll be able to use this
feature to introduce a new group of people to Scathach.
The foundation of the script is really strong because the characters are dynamic and each has a
very clear personality and an express purpose in the script. Scathach’s character is by far the most
interesting and fascinating which works out well since she is the main character. Scathach’s strong will and more liberal sensibilities makes her the perfect protagonist for the script because the audience can automatically relate to her character and her struggle. Everything about this story is
incredibly organic and lends itself very well to the feature you have written. ..overall the concept and the execution of this script
work incredibly well.
Los Angeles International Screenplay Awards Analysis
Structure/Plot
The script follows a traditional 3-act structure and has a clear, beginning, middle and end. The writer is talented in her ability to construct a story that builds towards a satisfactory ending as well as emphasize the theme of the story…Most often, battles sequences are used to thrill and engage a fantasy/action script, but the storytelling sequences are the prize of this script. The script repeatedly mentions the importance of language and stories and the writer honors that idea throughout the script.
Characters
Scathach is a fierce character and the reader feels an immediate kinship towards her as she is a powerful woman. Hugh and Diarmuid represent the angel and the devil on Scathach’s shoulders. Aine is an intelligent character and her age represents the childlike belief in folklore. She also represents a generation apart from Scathach. Scathach has been broken by war while Aine is a younger, brighter generation that still has hope for the future. While Diarmuid and Hugh fight over Scathach, it is Aine who wins her heart. Aine and Scathach’s relationship is the most compelling relationship in the film.
Dialogue
The dialogue is well written and organic. It also captures what the reader assumes is the dialect of early Ireland.
Pacing
The script is well-paced, and the reader is engaged in every page. The film is easy to read, and the reader wants to continue on to find out how the story ends. The plot moves forward and builds upon itself, cumulating in the Rebellion Army rediscovering their Irish roots and calling upon the Gods without Aine.
Conflict
The conflict is clear and present throughout the film.
Market potential/Concept
The premise of the script is well-formulated and engaging. It’s a perfect balance between history and fantasy. The writer is weaving together history and Irish folklore in a way that complements one another instead of fighting each other. It touches upon the importance of culture and storytelling in a way that is fun and empowering instead of preachy. There is not currently anything like this being marketed, which makes the writer’s concept fresh.
Final Comments:
The writer is talented in making words come alive and skilled in intricately weaving larger themes throughout a script without sounding preachy. The script is engaging and holds the reader’s attention to the end. The reader has enjoyed reading the script and compliments the writer on her writing capabilities.
Druid Media 